Homework 31- Comments 3

To Jasper (Lower Person):

I think that you choose a good topic because it was something that you and Kevin both seem to have some type of passion about. There aren't many voices or leaders for people who are disabled. The way that you used the interview to connect back to Sicko was also a very good idea because you connected something that you did on your own to something that we have been working together to do in class and figure out some of the atrocities and some of the dominant social practices. I think your best line was "This brought up the question in my head is it even possible to be sure that this wouldn't happen to you?" Because it seemed like a good way to wrap up the idea that you were aiming toward throughout your writing.

From Isabel (Higher Person):

Hey Chris,

I don't have much time but i did manage to read your blog and I think you had a couple of really sharp questions to ask your mom. It seems like you did a lot of work in coming up with some questions that connected back to what you were learning in class and this interview actually taught me a lot of things about your work and your moms lifestyle. I think the best line you recorded was "Then my best friend Denise died over a long period of time. She had breast cancer and had mastectomy on her breast. She became cancer free for ten years, but the cancer returned in her lungs. It traveled up to her brain and blinded her for a couple of days." because it did the best job at telling your reader what your learning and how it affects people. What you can improve on is proof reading some of your work and maybe adding some more of your own insights in your work. Besides that good job.


To Lucas (Group Member):

Lucas,

You did a really good job at finding all the research that you found and incorporating it into the work that we have been doing in class. You found a lot of good information to support your idea and the visual that you have at the top of your project is also very helpful to understanding what you wrote, you have a lot of food insights and it is something that makes me think a lot more about the situation then I normally would. There are a lot of good things that you have done and I am not quite sure what you could do to improve besides just always adding more insights even though you have a lot. This is a great blog and its easy to see how much effort you put into this good job.

To John (Group Member):


I liked your speech in class and it was something I didn't think about the entire unit until you did this project. I like the way you structured your post and the idea behind it. You also use evidence from the museum is a nice alternative to the internet research that most of us have done. I think on of the best lines you have on your still life post is, " It is important to analyze through the illness & dying lens and criticizing these reflections of society in culture just as it is to criticize McDonald’s advertising through a lens critical of American food ways for one general reason" because you start to attempt to connect two of our units and i like the statement that you use to wrap everything up. This was a good post.

To Ruben:

I think after you speech reading this now, I am better able to understand what you were talking about. I picked to comment on your blog because I actually liked the idea that you had because it was sort of like Amber and how there can be abuse in nursing homes because of neglect but your post is kind of the reverse of this because you talk about how you visit your grand parents. I think something you could have talked more about is what your grandparents thought and why you think you have to go visit your grandparents. You have some good ideas but I think you could have talked some more about your experiences.


To Richie:


I think you had a simple speech but it gave a brief idea of what your project was in its entirety. The reason that I wanted to comment on your blog is because it is kind of related to mine although yours is more of your experiences, I wanted to focus on my mother because she had a lot more experience like this. You do a good job at coming up with an idea that ties back to the dominant social practices we have been learning about and the idea of terminal illness also connects back to My Brother by Jamaica Kincaid. Good Post.